Post by Resplendant on Aug 8, 2007 14:48:17 GMT -5
Your character's name: Bonebreaker
Species is Dire-Wolf/Hellhound mix.
Their special abilities:
~Wicked eyes--no pupil, but he sees excellent and is well-adapted to the dark. These could scare the hell out of most animals, unless that animal has a great courage.
~1.2 inch teeth, all along the gumline and very pointy. Two 2" jaws, and two 2 fangs, both deadly and can sink into the toughest of hides.
~Nose, clearly visible, one of his honed senses. On a day with no wind, he could smell meat from a mile away. (That is NOT god-moddish, for there are animals IRL that smell farther away than that). He can smell in fog, though it would lessen his sense.
~Ears, visible as well, slightly better than a normal wolf's hearing.
~Stands at 5'3", and measures 6'3" long.
~Thick coat, to protect him from cold.
~Four hooked curved claws, 2.2" long. Retractible.
~Paws allow him to jump a small distance; 7-8 feet. And they also allow him to run at a normal of 25-35 mph nonstop for several hours.
~Foot long tail, not much use.
~Weighs 185 pounds.
A description of your character: The scariest dire-wolf you'll ever see.
A picture (optional):
A history (again, optional): N/A
A log post (can be of any character): The Shadow Within. Sleek mitts allowed smooth undertow of abundant foliage thriving 'pon earthen carpet draped over compact layers of fertile soil. Eerie onyx lunars cautiously scanned vast lands, disgust blazing in them. Dwarf-like caudal appendage flickered effortlessly at posterior of lupine hellhound. Maroon-hued tongue applied thick coat of layers of saliva over ivory fangs' gleaming exterior. Hidden earholes picked up traces of soundwaves, dreambox whipping curiously towards right-hand side. Muscular extremities shifted course, making rapid beeline for delicious aroma. Nares flared at aroma, knowing full well new scent was expelled by matured buck. <c>
The Shadow Within. Maroon-hued tongue applied fresh layer of saliva over saliva-encrusted jowls, a signal of the gnawing hunger that drove lupine hellion to change intended destiantion. Flaunting superior self, hellion's sleek mitts allowed quick covering of the vast lands. Finally, eerie onyx lunars settled comfortably 'pon small form. No doubt, nares confirmed this creature expelled the delicious aroma. Licking jowls hungrily again, lupine hellion silently stalked the buck, which was grazing. Inwardly berating self for not ravenously gorging himself 'pon a tasty morsel before, lupine hellion was forced to slaughter the pathetic buck or endure more hours of painful hunger. <c>
The Shadow Within. Sleek mitts made no sounds, acicular claws protracting from surreptitious sheathes. Still approaching, ever so slowly, the buck's doom was ready to murder. Allowing muscular hind-pillars to propel sinewy build into air, 152 kilos of pure death and bloodthirsty monster came hurtling towards unsuspecting buck. Since buck's posterior was in view, lupine hellion would catch it unawares; he was an effective killer. The buck reacted with furious bucks but to no avail, for no sooner had the second buck came then had the saliva-coated breakneck jaws descended towards the neck region. Punishing razors would aid in the rending of flesh to satisfy his gnawing hunger. <c>
The Shadow Within. Successful ambush earned malicious grin which etched itself 'cross saliva-encrusted cunning features. Horrid gurgling sound was reply to successful death-attempt: the sound of an animal drowning in it's own blood; the usual plight of animals whom he preyed upon. Letting wicked cackle erupt from maw, brief celebrating of satisfaction of gnawing hunger would take place. Several seconds later, it ended. Wicked razors rended flesh ravenously, chunks of meat and flesh sliding down esophagus, hot, warm blood in quick pursuit. The lupine hellion savored every morsel, though in a few hours he would have to hunt again. <c>
The Shadow Within. Upon nearing the climax of his ravenous feast, a sudden growl caused eerie onyx lunars to advert their fixed icy gaze 'pon the corpse towardsa bush, where the soundwaves had originated from. Annoyance flickered in dreambox; flames seemed to dance along the top of the eerie onyx lunars, and from the shrubbery exploded a trio of wolven creatures, their arsenal of inferior weapons positioned within the the crisp white jowls bared ferociously. Narrowing lunars, lupine hellion thought, what now? Springing to sleek mitts, saliva-coated ivory fangs and wicked-sharp razors were savagely bared as saliva-encrusted jowls widely parted to uncloak the deadly arsenal of weaponry. <c>
The Shadow Within. Vocals molded into a brutal roar which echoed throughout the vast landscape. Onyx lunars were ablaze now, lupine hellion seething with uncontrollable anger. The enraged hellion approached slowly, acicular claws protracting from surreptitious sheathes within sleek mitts again. Sleek mitts no longer were silent; great thuds followed every imprint left in the trampled foliage thriving 'pon the earthen carpet. An unearthly hiss escaped maw, scaley hide bristling. Their death was a quick succession, for the lupine hellion's enragement caused unknown strength to surge up and be purged in a massacre of lives. <c>
The Shadow Within. The first wolf to enter oblivion was the far right one; he had accelerated to top velocities, hurtling onto it's back and in quick success plunging his saliva-coated ivory-fangs deep within the wolf's windpipe. It was going to die, no doubt. Following up with more barbaric strength, scaley hellion hurled himself at the wolf positioned within the middle of the group, which was on the verge of scattering. Knocking the wolf off of it's mitts, claws drove deeply into the neck region again. The wolf would suffer the same plight: death by drowning in it's own blood; among his species, this was an embarrasing death and was often greeted by laughter deep within the pits of hell. <c>
The Shadow Within. Finally, the last surge of unresistable strength was upon him; it was time to purge his enragement. He broke out into the fastest sprint of his archaic life, and in one thrust of his muscular hind-pillars, was upon the wolven fool, tearing it's dreambox from the body. The decapitated corpse shuddered and collapsed to the ground, blood gushing from severed neck. He flung several yards away with a powerful whip of his muscular neck. Hunger was once again upon him, and he lay down, rending flesh with wicked-sharp razors and saliva-coated ivory fangs. It was not until every animal around him had only scraps of flesh left did he let up. <c>
The Shadow Within. His hunger satisfied, he trotted off, dreambox held high to signal his superiority to all animals that lurked in the shadows and in plain view (which was a dumb thing to do). The lupine hellion had once again proven his superiority, and any animal that dared defy it would suffer the same fate as the trio he had recently encountered, and murdered and ravenously gorged himself upon. All creatures of the forest were to learn this rule the easy way or the hard way: the hellion ruled over all. Wickedly-sharp razors and saliva-coated ivory fangs would ensure that these bloody rules were followed. Any defiance was actually liked, for it meant that bloodshed would follow in a massacre. It was time for them all to learn it. The easy way. Or the hard way. <e>
A sample post portraying your abilities (make it up if needed): I don't see why I would need to...there aren't any special abilities. Just a wicked body and some claws and jaws. But if you really want me to, I'll whip out a sample post.
I didn't put in any weaknesses, because I wanted to know what staff thought was wrong about it. Then, I'll use what they said and further tame this beast.
Btw, this isn't to be superior--I swear on my heart. It's just that I really want Bonebreaker to be something formidable, even though you can be formidable normally. I am sorry if this is a waste of your time.
Species is Dire-Wolf/Hellhound mix.
Their special abilities:
~Wicked eyes--no pupil, but he sees excellent and is well-adapted to the dark. These could scare the hell out of most animals, unless that animal has a great courage.
~1.2 inch teeth, all along the gumline and very pointy. Two 2" jaws, and two 2 fangs, both deadly and can sink into the toughest of hides.
~Nose, clearly visible, one of his honed senses. On a day with no wind, he could smell meat from a mile away. (That is NOT god-moddish, for there are animals IRL that smell farther away than that). He can smell in fog, though it would lessen his sense.
~Ears, visible as well, slightly better than a normal wolf's hearing.
~Stands at 5'3", and measures 6'3" long.
~Thick coat, to protect him from cold.
~Four hooked curved claws, 2.2" long. Retractible.
~Paws allow him to jump a small distance; 7-8 feet. And they also allow him to run at a normal of 25-35 mph nonstop for several hours.
~Foot long tail, not much use.
~Weighs 185 pounds.
A description of your character: The scariest dire-wolf you'll ever see.
A picture (optional):
A history (again, optional): N/A
A log post (can be of any character): The Shadow Within. Sleek mitts allowed smooth undertow of abundant foliage thriving 'pon earthen carpet draped over compact layers of fertile soil. Eerie onyx lunars cautiously scanned vast lands, disgust blazing in them. Dwarf-like caudal appendage flickered effortlessly at posterior of lupine hellhound. Maroon-hued tongue applied thick coat of layers of saliva over ivory fangs' gleaming exterior. Hidden earholes picked up traces of soundwaves, dreambox whipping curiously towards right-hand side. Muscular extremities shifted course, making rapid beeline for delicious aroma. Nares flared at aroma, knowing full well new scent was expelled by matured buck. <c>
The Shadow Within. Maroon-hued tongue applied fresh layer of saliva over saliva-encrusted jowls, a signal of the gnawing hunger that drove lupine hellion to change intended destiantion. Flaunting superior self, hellion's sleek mitts allowed quick covering of the vast lands. Finally, eerie onyx lunars settled comfortably 'pon small form. No doubt, nares confirmed this creature expelled the delicious aroma. Licking jowls hungrily again, lupine hellion silently stalked the buck, which was grazing. Inwardly berating self for not ravenously gorging himself 'pon a tasty morsel before, lupine hellion was forced to slaughter the pathetic buck or endure more hours of painful hunger. <c>
The Shadow Within. Sleek mitts made no sounds, acicular claws protracting from surreptitious sheathes. Still approaching, ever so slowly, the buck's doom was ready to murder. Allowing muscular hind-pillars to propel sinewy build into air, 152 kilos of pure death and bloodthirsty monster came hurtling towards unsuspecting buck. Since buck's posterior was in view, lupine hellion would catch it unawares; he was an effective killer. The buck reacted with furious bucks but to no avail, for no sooner had the second buck came then had the saliva-coated breakneck jaws descended towards the neck region. Punishing razors would aid in the rending of flesh to satisfy his gnawing hunger. <c>
The Shadow Within. Successful ambush earned malicious grin which etched itself 'cross saliva-encrusted cunning features. Horrid gurgling sound was reply to successful death-attempt: the sound of an animal drowning in it's own blood; the usual plight of animals whom he preyed upon. Letting wicked cackle erupt from maw, brief celebrating of satisfaction of gnawing hunger would take place. Several seconds later, it ended. Wicked razors rended flesh ravenously, chunks of meat and flesh sliding down esophagus, hot, warm blood in quick pursuit. The lupine hellion savored every morsel, though in a few hours he would have to hunt again. <c>
The Shadow Within. Upon nearing the climax of his ravenous feast, a sudden growl caused eerie onyx lunars to advert their fixed icy gaze 'pon the corpse towardsa bush, where the soundwaves had originated from. Annoyance flickered in dreambox; flames seemed to dance along the top of the eerie onyx lunars, and from the shrubbery exploded a trio of wolven creatures, their arsenal of inferior weapons positioned within the the crisp white jowls bared ferociously. Narrowing lunars, lupine hellion thought, what now? Springing to sleek mitts, saliva-coated ivory fangs and wicked-sharp razors were savagely bared as saliva-encrusted jowls widely parted to uncloak the deadly arsenal of weaponry. <c>
The Shadow Within. Vocals molded into a brutal roar which echoed throughout the vast landscape. Onyx lunars were ablaze now, lupine hellion seething with uncontrollable anger. The enraged hellion approached slowly, acicular claws protracting from surreptitious sheathes within sleek mitts again. Sleek mitts no longer were silent; great thuds followed every imprint left in the trampled foliage thriving 'pon the earthen carpet. An unearthly hiss escaped maw, scaley hide bristling. Their death was a quick succession, for the lupine hellion's enragement caused unknown strength to surge up and be purged in a massacre of lives. <c>
The Shadow Within. The first wolf to enter oblivion was the far right one; he had accelerated to top velocities, hurtling onto it's back and in quick success plunging his saliva-coated ivory-fangs deep within the wolf's windpipe. It was going to die, no doubt. Following up with more barbaric strength, scaley hellion hurled himself at the wolf positioned within the middle of the group, which was on the verge of scattering. Knocking the wolf off of it's mitts, claws drove deeply into the neck region again. The wolf would suffer the same plight: death by drowning in it's own blood; among his species, this was an embarrasing death and was often greeted by laughter deep within the pits of hell. <c>
The Shadow Within. Finally, the last surge of unresistable strength was upon him; it was time to purge his enragement. He broke out into the fastest sprint of his archaic life, and in one thrust of his muscular hind-pillars, was upon the wolven fool, tearing it's dreambox from the body. The decapitated corpse shuddered and collapsed to the ground, blood gushing from severed neck. He flung several yards away with a powerful whip of his muscular neck. Hunger was once again upon him, and he lay down, rending flesh with wicked-sharp razors and saliva-coated ivory fangs. It was not until every animal around him had only scraps of flesh left did he let up. <c>
The Shadow Within. His hunger satisfied, he trotted off, dreambox held high to signal his superiority to all animals that lurked in the shadows and in plain view (which was a dumb thing to do). The lupine hellion had once again proven his superiority, and any animal that dared defy it would suffer the same fate as the trio he had recently encountered, and murdered and ravenously gorged himself upon. All creatures of the forest were to learn this rule the easy way or the hard way: the hellion ruled over all. Wickedly-sharp razors and saliva-coated ivory fangs would ensure that these bloody rules were followed. Any defiance was actually liked, for it meant that bloodshed would follow in a massacre. It was time for them all to learn it. The easy way. Or the hard way. <e>
A sample post portraying your abilities (make it up if needed): I don't see why I would need to...there aren't any special abilities. Just a wicked body and some claws and jaws. But if you really want me to, I'll whip out a sample post.
I didn't put in any weaknesses, because I wanted to know what staff thought was wrong about it. Then, I'll use what they said and further tame this beast.
Btw, this isn't to be superior--I swear on my heart. It's just that I really want Bonebreaker to be something formidable, even though you can be formidable normally. I am sorry if this is a waste of your time.